Hunchback

[Geoni]

I worry that it's too soon for me (in terms of how long it's been since my return) to make this thread, but I feel confident that I have roleplayed with most of the people active on the server at some point. I have hunches as to where I could improve, but first I need to introduce myself.

About me as a player: I'm 18, going to college, and drifting from one interest to another. I've always been the type of learner who has a lot of intrapersonal intelligence and very little interpersonal intelligence, and I've always approached thinking about things in a holistic way; I think these things show up in my RP here and there. My characters are each a kernal of my personality that I've heated up and popped into some popcorn. I'll leave that up to interpretation, though. As for my characters, and the feedback I want for them...I'll give you a hunch of what aspect of the character I have trouble RPing. If anybody can give some advice on those hunches, it would be appreciated. General feedback is equally appreciated.

The Characters

Ghurm Whitehoof

Character Summary:

Spoiler:

That Tauren with bright white fur. Ghurm is one of the few elder Shaman in his tribe, but he is often absent, on vision quests. Currently, he is taking on the longest vision quest of his life. Inspired both by a dream and his grandmother's own vision on her deathbed, he is investigating "forests to the North". This has landed him all the way to the Timbermaw and their hold.

Description of character can be read here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Ghurm

Hunch: I can't decide how Ghurm speaks in common versus how he speaks in his own language. I feel like I'm too casual when it comes to Ghurm speaking common, but I don't know how to incorporate Taur'ahe accent or grammar rules into his translation. This is something easier with other races, since they have more lore to back their language structures up. I'd love some tips about this.

Xelti Steamfledge

Character summary:

Spoiler:

Xelti is a compact bomb with a short fuse. She abandoned the path that her father set for her and even went as far as stealing from him in order to pursue tailoring and jewelry making (which is also tinkering, as I'll explain in the next sentence). She resides in Booty Bay, where she makes custom dresses for short women (Gnomes, Dwarves, Goblin, and some Blood Elves), and behind the scenes she creates jewelry and accessories that double as weapons (for example, an explosive necklace).

Full description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Xelti

Hunch: I need to work harder on finding the types of people (and by that I mean other characters on the server) who she would be involved with, both in terms of tailoring and her illegal devices. Also, something that somebody pointed out when I first posted the profile for Xelti was that she was too young. At 18, she's just old enough to be playable, but in regards to Gnomes, she's still a child. I'll get around to rewriting her profile so that she's in her mid-twenties, because I have a feeling that will justify her character more. Tell me if I'm wrong here.


Troovo

Character summary:

Spoiler:

16,000 year old Draenei cook, adventurer, and spice trader. His hair is long, flowing, and pesters him when it comes to being a good cook, so he ties it up into a ponytail. His memories are much like his hair, but he has nothing to bind them with, and he just can't go through with cutting his memories away. He has lost many people in his life, and as much as he is trying to move on and pursue a career in cooking, those ghosts of his past are always trying to drag him backwards. This is the best way I can summarize this character.

Full description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Troovo

Hunch: I'm not sure I have much of a hunch for this character, I feel like I'm nailing what I'm trying to do with him. However, I do think that I should get him involved with more characters on the server. Perhaps I should make some sort of event surrounding his character. A storyline? Perhaps a cooking event?

Dailuu

Character summary:

Spoiler:

12,000 year old Draenei Death Knight who is obsessed with flowers. She finds it interesting to watch the decay of the reproductive organ of a plant and people's obsession with it. She also associates herself with the flower in that it is something alive; although, she thinks of herself as a wilted flower. This obsession, along with fighting against the Burning Legion and finding her uncle (Troovo), is what keeps her going.

Full description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Dailuu

Hunch: I feel like I need to involve Dailuu in some kind of storyline, or some kind of guild, because I don't know where else I'll find RP for her. I don't know where she belongs on this server as a character, but I want her to belong, somehow.

Vaye

Character summary:

Spoiler:

She's a young priestess in training, who has decided that living on a farm and studying from not only books but experience is the way The Light wants her to learn. She has a mother who is strict with her because she is the only family that her mother has left. As a result, Vaye has become strict with herself, and she finds that she is good at keeping herself in line, but children and some adults as well.

Full description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Vaye

Hunch: I need to play her more often, I've just prioritized Veronika for RP in the Appleflow Family due to the events. I think what I need to do is have her roleplay with characters outside of the family as well. But where do I find other RP in the Stormwind-Elwynn Forest-Westfall areas?

Veronika

Character summary:

Spoiler:

Character that was made for the events in the Appleflow Family. A woman who has been through enough abuse from men to fall into misandry. She's an ex Defias who quit after the organization changed and after her ideas and inventions were turned down by another Defias. She remained a rogue, intent on ruining the lives of those who use other for their own objectives. But how far should vengeance and her ideals of justice go? Certainly not as far as death. Yet, on accident, she has killed a man in self defense. She dangerously involves herself with the family of the victim, trying to figure out what she can do with the situation. She has further ideals that I'll go into more description with if she survives the Appleflow Family event.

Hunch: Her intentions are to find other women who she can turn into what, according to her, are rogues of 'justice'. She calls them flowers, because she has identified herself with the violet and wants other women to do the same for themselves (this is further explained in her history, I've just got to get around to posting her profile). I don't feel very confident about how I am going to go about having this character try to turn women into rogues.

Gurvok

Character summary:

Spoiler:

A middle aged Orc who has been a part of the Shattered Hand Clan for his entire life. He now works as a worg-riding assassin. Both he and his mount (who he calls "Mother") are both getting old for the job, but both are in not only a mental denial, but a physical denial of aging as well. Gurvok is a busy guy, meaning that he's often full of anxiety and sleeplessness.

Full description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Gurvok

Hunch: I need to RP him! I've put a lot of effort into creating this character but I rarely RP him. I intended for him to be involved in some of the Deadeye Watchers' RP, and he's in the guild. Not really a hunch, I need to RP with the guild more (once I can get all of my classwork done and get on at the same time as most of the guild members).

Eta

Character summary:

Spoiler:

Eta juggles the job of a spirit walker, a mother, and the mate of a chieftain. She didn't seek this busy life, rather, it sought her. Just as she was given the 'gift' of being a Spirit Walker, she found love, and eventually a son. Her past is full of ghosts, just as her mind is full of spirits. She was born to a dying tribe, and raised by the last two Tauren to survive a Centaur raid. Then, she fell in love with a spirit walker, became a spirit walker herself, and their love fell apart due to the task of their jobs; eventually, her lover killed himself. But she tries to move on, and not let the past pull her away from the things she holds important.

Full character description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Eta

Hunch: I don't have much of a hunch for Eta yet. I think I will have one once the guild kicks off and once I can drive some of the events with the character. That's something I'm not used to doing, so I'll update this 'hunch' once that happens. Other than that, I feel like I'm at a very comfortable start with this character, despite the challenge of playing her and balancing all that she has to deal with.

Loyus

Character summary:

Spoiler:

To keep it short, Loyus has lived the life of a learner; he has spent most of his years with his head in books. He was obsessed with death for a long time, and though his obsession has calmed down as he has gotten older, the concept and thoughts of death are always on his mind. After taking part in defending Silvermoon and failing at that, along with travelling around with an entertainer for a while, he has returned to Silvermoon to hop from job to job. There are two jobs that he has held onto: attending to one of Silvermoon's graveyards, and being a barkeeper at a local tavern.

Full description here: http://wiki.conquestofthehorde.com/Loyus

Hunch: Seeing as I haven't had any RP on this character yet, and he's still new, I need RP before I can come up with any good hunch. I'd like to see how well I can pull of his abstract sense of sarcasm in game, as I'm sure that will be challenging. But really, I need RP for this guy!

Me, the player!

Hunch: I feel like one of my problems when it comes to communicating with everyone here is coherency. I'm not a very coherent person, and there's a reason for that, but there's also a way to fix it. I have a feeling that not being so wordy and wonky with my sentences might be a place to start. This is just a hunch. Tell me if I'm being too critical of myself if you think so. Any other feedback surrounding how I interact with you guys would be helpful as well.

[Zhaei]

You're a nice guy! The occasional chat I have with you on Skype is pleasurable enough.

I've only really had interaction with Troovo and I've always wanted to talk to you about him. Most of it has been with Lilli on the Draenic Pilgrimage, though I bumped into him on Jurok as you described in my own thread.

I have a great admiration for both Troovo and how you play him. I feel like there is a huge amount I don't know about the character and I really want to find out. He barely said a word in Common during the pilgrimage, but even from your emotes I was fascinated. He had just the right amount of altruism, quirkiness and mysterious intelligence that I feel makes the quintessential Draenei. I admire you for shifting the focus of the character away from the boring combat, combat, combat archetype. I really like the concept of a Draenic cook, so much that I made my own! Troovo was her inspiration, in part.

I'd really like some more RP, preferably one-on-one, with Troovo so I can properly get to know the character and possibly identify some faults that would be more useful feedback wise. Hit me up on Skype.

[Geoni]

Always welcome to RP when the time and the timezones are right. Any one on one RP will help me figure some things out about Troovo that I didn't already realize myself.

[Geoni]

Bump. I've added Eta and Loyus to the character list.

As a disclaimer, I've retired Xelti (for now, but feedback is still appreciated), and I don't RP on Veronika much anymore. I also don't know if I'm doing well with communicating with you guys, so feedback is appreciated when it comes to that as well.

[Geoni]

Buuuump. I still want feedback and haven't gotten much.

One of the things that I've noticed about myself is that I don't do well with long term fighting RP. Perhaps it's my RP preference, but I feel like there's only so much I can emote before I repeat myself when it comes to having my character fight.

[Geoni]

buuuuuump



Seriously though guys, I'd like some feedback. I've been active again for more than half a year and I haven't gotten any constructive criticism.

[Bovel]

The lack of responses is because people don't have anything bad to say, THAT'S A GOOD THING!


Troovo
You are probably one of less than handful of players that grasp how to roleplay a good draenei from the get-go. He is believable and feels like his age through your emotes. Definitely one of my favourite draenei characters around CotH, evet.

Gurvok
Only tripped over Gurvok very briefly but the little session in Orgrimmar yesterday alone was aweomse, his survivalist perspective on life and his worgs. (All I want is for him to be a hunter in-game so Mother or other worgs can be represented by a model.)

You
A great eye for detail in your characters that is rare. I've only read about Eta but look foward to throw Bokuru at her. Out of RP you are nice, have your head in the game and seems to have the same preferences for RP like myself.


The only critique or suggestions I can throw your way is this; I wanna see more of Troovo and I can sort of see why he becomes somewhat passive during events due to his profession but you can still be active in the roleplay while keeping the character passive. Imagine him being feeling forced to act or ask the rest of us to OOCly order him to join in.